改正和改进一下这篇文章BUSESToday I wanna talk about some interesting things I came through.And this story is about buses.Everyday we had to take the bus from our homestay to the meeting point----Catford Island or to the school----ISIS.To C

改正和改进一下这篇文章BUSESToday I wanna talk about some interesting things I came through.And this story is about buses.Everyday we had to take the bus from our homestay to the meeting point----Catford Island or to the school----ISIS.To C
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BUSES
Today I wanna talk about some interesting things I came through.And this story is about buses.Everyday we had to take the bus from our homestay to the meeting point----Catford Island or to the school----ISIS.To Catford,we could take the bus 136 or 208.At first,Dean Dean told us that he preferred the bus 208 to 136,but we didn’t know why.Few days later,we found something scary on the bus 136.We saw a women whose pants were dotted with blood,and there was a policeman stood by her.We were very scared and from then on,we’d never dare to take the bus 136……
But later on we still took the bus 136 once more because we had waited for a very long time but the bus 208 didn’t come.This time we saw a drunk black man,he shouted abuse on the bus,we felt that 136 was really dangerous.
The last time we took the bus 136 was in a night.That night we went to a party.The sky was getting dark when we were about to go home.It was over 9’o clock.We wanted to get as soon as possible,so when we saw 136,we got on it at once.But I knew something was going to happen!This time,we didn’t see any strange people and things were going well.But suddenly,the bus stopped.Afterwards we knew it was a bad engine.
That’s all.

改正和改进一下这篇文章BUSESToday I wanna talk about some interesting things I came through.And this story is about buses.Everyday we had to take the bus from our homestay to the meeting point----Catford Island or to the school----ISIS.To C
BUSES
Today I wanna(want 正规英文写作中不可用语言上的用语） talk about some interesting things (that) I came through.And this story is about buses.Everyday(delete everyday) we had to take the bus from our homestay to the meeting point-Catford Island or to the school-ISIS (put everyday right here)(,and )we could take the bus 136 or 208 (to Catford).Before,Dean Dean told us that he preferred (to take) bus 208 to 136,but we didn’t(change to did not,because 合格的essay不能这样用） know (the reason) why.Few days later,we found something(delete something) scary (things) on the bus 136.(During taking the bus 208 to 136,要有一个转折) we saw a women(用woman,women是复数) whose pants were dotted with blood,and there was a policeman stood by her.We were very scared.From then on,we’d never dare to take the bus 136……
But later on we still took the bus 136 once more because we had to wait for a very long time(for the No.208 buses.) but the bus 208 didn’t come.(建议delete这半句) This time we saw a drunk black man,he shouted abuse(use abusing,cuz abuse is a verb though.u cannot use two verbs in one sentence.) on the bus,we felt that No.136 was a really dangerous bus.
The last time we took the bus No.136 was in a night.In that night we went to a party.The sky was getting dark when we were about to go home.It was over 9’o clock.We wanted to get(bus) as soon as possible,so(delete so..if u want to) when we saw No.136,we got on it at once(delete?).But I knew something was going to happen!This time,we didn’t(did not) see any strange people and things were going well(we did not see any strange people and things,and everything is going fine).But(delete but,suddenly is enough) suddenly,the bus stopped.Afterwards we knew it was a bad engine.
That’s all.
建议你不要用中文的想法去写英文文章.我之前也是的.不过多炼就好了.加油.by the way,你是在哪里?）

THE BUS 136
Today I wanna talk about some interesting things I had experienced. This story is about buses. Everyday we had to take the bus from our home to the meeting point----Catford Island or...

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THE BUS 136
Today I wanna talk about some interesting things I had experienced. This story is about buses. Everyday we had to take the bus from our home to the meeting point----Catford Island or to the school----ISIS. To Catford, we could take the bus 136 or 208. At first. Dean told us that he preferred the bus 208 to 136, but we didn’t know why. a few days later, we found something scary on the bus 136. We saw a women whose pants were dotted with blood, and there was a policeman stood by her. We were very scared and from then on, we’d never dare to take the bus 136……
But later on we still took the bus 136 once again because we had waited for a very long time and the bus 208 didn’t come. This time we saw a drunk black man, he shouted abusly im the bus, we felt that 136 was really dangerous.
The last time we took the bus 136 was on a night. That night we went to a party. It start getting dark when we were about to go home. It was past 9 clock. We wanted to get home as soon as possible, so when we saw 136, we got on it at once even though I knew something was going to happen! This time, we didn’t see any strange people . things were going well. suddenly, the bus stopped. We all very frightened.Afterwards we knew it was a bad engine.What do you think of it?scarely or interesting?
That’s all.
小小修改了一下,你的文笔满不错哦.

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the tales of No.136 BUS
today i wanna tell you something interesting about the buses.we take bus everyday on our way to Catford,alternatively,no.136 bus or no.208 bus.at first, Dean told us that h...

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the tales of No.136 BUS
today i wanna tell you something interesting about the buses.we take bus everyday on our way to Catford,alternatively,no.136 bus or no.208 bus.at first, Dean told us that he preferred the bus 208 to 136, but we didn’t know why.Few days later, we found something scary on the bus 136. We saw a women whose pants were dotted with blood, and there was a policeman stood by her. We were very scared and from then on, we thought we'd never dare to take the no.136 bus.
But later on we have to take the bus 136 once more because we had waited for a very long time but the bus 208 didn’t come. This time we saw a drunk black man, he shouted and shouted on the bus, we felt that no.136 bus was really a dangerous one.
The last time we took the bus 136 was in a night. That night we went to a party. The sky was getting dark when we were about to go home. It was over 9’o clock. We wanted to get as soon as possible, so when we saw 136, we got on it at once. But I knew something was going to happen! This time, we didn’t see any strange people and things were going well. But suddenly, the bus stopped. Afterwards we knew it was a bad engine.
lol....the bus has been cursed!!!!!!!!!!

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